一、求助信
【真题·2016年全国卷I书面表达】
假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外资公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历（resume）。给外教Ms Jenkins写信，请她帮你修改所附材料的文字和格式（format）。
注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
【写作指导】
一、审题
本题要求写一封求助信。求助信主要是就某一问题向收信人求助。求助的对象可以是个人或机构。 求助信的人称以第一人称为主，时态以现在时为主。求助信的语言应诚恳真挚，求助的目的应清晰明确。二、谋篇
求助信的格式和其它的信件一样，通常包括称呼、正文、结束语和签名。内容主要包括自我介绍（如与收信人熟悉，可省去此项）、希望得到的帮助以及对收信人的感谢。就本题而言，正文可按照以下三部分进行写作： 第一部分：说明写信目的； 第二部分：阐述求助原因（暑假想去一家外资公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历）及求助内容（让外教帮助修改所附材料的文字和格式）； 第三部分：表达感谢。
【参考范文】
Dear Ms Jenkins,
I’m Li Hua from your English writing class last term. I’m writing to ask for your help.
I’m applying for a part-time job at a foreign company in my city during the summer vacation, and I have just completed my application letter and resume. However, I am not quite sure of the language and the format I’ve used. I know you have a very busy schedule, but I’d be very grateful if you could take some time to go through them and make necessary changes. You can find my application letter and resume in the attachment.
Thank you for your kindness!
Yours,
Li Hua
【点评】
本文完全完成了试题规定的任务：开篇用一句话介绍了自己，接着表明写信目的，然后详细阐述求助原因及内容，最后表达感激之情。作者使用了较多的语法结构，如定语从句、宾语从句、状语从句、并列句等。文章中使用的词汇丰富且准确，如busy schedule, attachment等。
【实战演练】
下面是一位同学的习作，请根据点评中指出的问题对它进行修改。
Dear Ms Jenkins,
I’m writing to ask for your help. With the summer vacation around the corner, I’ve decided to apply for a part-time job at a foreign company in my city. I think it’s really meaningful.
The problem is that although I’ve finished the application and the format, I am really not sure about the words I’ve used. I’m afraid that the format I’ve used is informal. So I write to you. I’m sure you must be very busy, and I feel sorry for taking up your time. However, I also feel lucky and appreciate because I know you won’t let me down.
Thank you very much.
Yours,
Li Hua
【点评】
该习作完成了试题规定的任务，要点齐全、语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求、内容衔接流畅。存在的问题有：一、没有审清题意——题中说的是已写好申请书和个人简历，请外教帮忙修改文字和格式，而第二段首句写的是写好了申请书和格式，请外教修改文字；二、从选词方面来说，format不能与informal搭配使用，appreciate用词不当；三、第二段中的So I write to you不能清晰地表达求助的具体内容。
【参考答案】
Dear Ms Jenkins,
I’m writing to ask for your help. With the summer vacation around the corner, I’ve decided to apply for a part-time job at a foreign company in my city. I think it’s really meaningful.
The problem is that although I’ve finished the application and resume, I am really not sure about the words and the format I’ve used. So I’d like you to check them for me. I’m sure you must be very busy, and I feel sorry for taking up your time. However, I also feel lucky and grateful because I know you won’t let me down.
Thank you very much.
Yours,
Li Hua
附1：常用求助信表达及范例
〖好句背诵〗
1. I would be very grateful if you could…
如果您能……我将感激不尽。
2. I would appreciate it if you could offer me a hand.
如您能帮助我，我将感激不尽。
3. Thanks for your kind consideration and I look forward to receiving your earliest reply.
谢谢您的关注，期待收到您尽早的回复。
4. If you need further information, do let me know.
如您需要更多的信息，请告知我。
〖佳作赏读〗
假定你是李华。请你给笔友 Peter 写封信，告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会，带去他想要的那幅中国画，同时询问他是否可以接机。信中还需说明：
李明：高个子，戴眼镜
航班号：CA985
到达：8月6日上午11：30
Dear Peter,
How are you doing？I'm writing to tell you that my uncle LiMing is going to have a meeting in your city. Do you remember the Chinese painting I promised you last year? My uncle will bring it to you soon. I hope you will like it.
I wonder if you could do me a favor. This is the first time that my uncle visits the US, so I hope you can meet him at the airport. He arrives at 11 ： 30 a.m on August 6th and his flight number is CA 985. I would appreciate it if you could take him to his hotel. My uncle is tall. He will be wearing dark glasses and a blue jacket.
Looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
二、道歉信
【真题·2016年全国卷III书面表达】
假定你是李华，与留学生朋友Bob约好一起去书店，因故不能赴约。请给他写封邮件，内容包括：
1. 表示歉意；
2. 说明原因；
3. 另约时间。
注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
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【写作指导】
一、审题
本题要求写一封道歉信，为因故不能赴约向朋友表示歉意。由于高考中对邮件和信的要求完全一致，故本栏目统称其为“信”。人称以第一人称为主，时态需由具体内容决定。二、谋篇
道歉信正文的主要内容包括表达歉意和说明事情原委两部分。具体到本题，只需按照要点顺序写作即可，即表示歉意→说明原因→另约时间。同样，因题目中要点提示较少，考生需合理补充细节，如另约的具体时间、见面地点等。
【参考范文】
Dear Bob,
I'm sorry to say that I cannot go to the bookstore with you on Friday afternoon. I have just found that I have to attend an important class meeting that afternoon. I hope the change will not cause you too much trouble.
Shall we go on Saturday morning? We can set out early so that we'll have more time to read and select books. If it's convenient for you, let's meet at 8:30 outside the school gate. If not, let me know what time suits you best. I should be available any time after school next week.
Yours,
Li Hua
【点评】
作者在首段表示歉意并说明了原因，在第二段另约时间，覆盖了所有内容要点。同时，作者应用了较多的语法结构，如宾语从句that I cannot go to the bookstore with you on Friday afternoon、状语从句so that we'll have more time to read and select books、祈使句let me know等。文章用到的高级词汇有set out, select, convenient, suit, available等。
作者表达歉意时很真诚，如I hope the change will not cause you too much trouble；在“另约时间”部分想得也很周到：既提出了自己方便的时间也考虑到了对方。
【实战演练】
下面是一位同学的习作，请根据点评中指出的问题对它进行修改。
Dear Bob,
I'm so sorry to tell you that I can't go to the bookstore with you this Saturday. Because I just be told that our class is going to hold a walking activity, in which everyone must take part. I hope that this won't cause trouble to you.
So how about choose another time? Are you available this Sunday? If it's all right, let's meet at the bus stop at 3 o'clock pm. If not, please call me back as soon as possible. Thus, we can discuss the matter in more detail.
I do apologize sincerely to you again. And I'm looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
【点评】
该习作完成了试题规定的任务，要点齐全，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。存在的问题有：①小错误太多，如Because I ...（除回答Why开头的问句外，以because开头的句子不能单独存在），just be told, how about choose, 3 o'clock pm；②部分语言不连贯，如I hope that this won't中的this指代不明，call me back出现得有点突兀。
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【参考答案】
Dear Bob,
I'm so sorry to tell you that I can't go to the bookstore with you this Saturday. I was just told that our class is going to hold a walking activity, in which everyone must take part. I hope that this change won't cause trouble to you.
So how about choosing another time? Are you available this Sunday? If it's all right, let's meet at the bus stop at 3 pm. If not, please ring me up as soon as possible. Thus, we can discuss the matter in more detail.
I do apologize sincerely to you again. And I'm looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
附2：道歉信常用句式及范例
〖好句背诵〗
1. I feel terribly sorry for missing the chance of answering your letter in time.
我十分抱歉没有时向信。
2. Anyhow, I sincerely hope that we can fix another time for...
无论如何，我真心希望我们可以再找一个时间......
3. I'm awfully sorry for the sudden change of plan feel it a great pity to miss the opportunity.
对突然的改变我感到十分抱歉，对错过这个机会感到很可惜。
〖佳作赏读〗
假如你是新华中学的学生李华，你的美国朋友Tom一周前给你发电子邮件，询问你暑假里的打算，但你因准备期末考试未能及时回复。请根据以下要点给他回封邮件：
1. 未及时回信的原因
2. 你假期的打算（如做兼职、旅行、做志愿者等）。
Dear Tom,
I I'm terribly sorry I couldn't reply to your email which you sent me a week ago immediately. I was so occupied with the final exams.
As for the coming summer holiday, I will first do a part time job in a fast-food restaurant. Not only will I earn some money but I will also gain some social experience through it. And then | will go on a trip to Sichuan, where there are a great number of places of interest. Finally, go to Ya'an to work as a volunteer. There is no doubt that children there are badly in need of help. I hope what I will do will make a great difference to them.
Best wishes.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
三、通知
【真题再现·2014年辽宁卷书面表达】
假定你是学生会主席李华。学校将举办一次以“校园生活·创意无限”(Innovations on Campus) 为主题的创意作品展评活动。请你根据以下图示，以短文形式用英语写一份书面通知。
注意：1. 词数100左右； 2. 可以适当发挥，以使行文连贯；3. 开头及结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。
参考词汇：校园 campus 创意作品 innovation 颁奖 prize-giving
Notice
An exciting event “Innovations on Campus” is around the corner.
Come on, everybody! It’s your show time.
Student Union
【写作指导】
一、审题
本题要求根据图片内容写一份通知，向同学们传达学校要举办的创意作品展评活动的相关事项。人称主要用第二和第三人称。时态主要用一般现在时和一般将来时。二、谋篇
通知的写作要点如下： 1. 在第一行的中间位置写Notice或NOTICE； 2. 正文要交待清楚通知的对象、活动的内容、时间和地点； 3. 发出通知的人的姓名或单位的名称一般写在正文右下角； 4. 发出通知的日期可写在正文的左上方或右上方，也可省略。 本题已给出通知的格式及正文的开头和结尾，考生只需说明以下与活动相关的内容：①向全校学生征集与校园生活有关的创意作品； ②参加人员需提供作品创意说明； ③展评时间、地点以及颁奖时间；④联系人及电话。
【参考范文】
Notice
An exciting event “Innovations on Campus” is around the corner. Every one of you is expected to be part of the event which encourages creative minds and gives full play to your DIY skills.
Note that your innovations must be school things. Along with your wonderful innovation, you need to hand in a report, explaining how the idea occurs to you and what materials you use.
All the collections will be on show from June 16 to 18 in the gym. Looking forward to the prize-giving ceremony? Sure! It’ll be held from 15:00 to 17:00 on June 18. So don’t miss the chance of being the winner. Your contribution will certainly make the event a huge success. For any questions, call Li Hua at 44876655.
Come on, everybody! It’s your show time.
Student Union
【点评】
本文覆盖了所有内容要点，且文章富有感召力。作者应用的较为复杂的语法结构有定语从句、祈使句、非谓语动词、how / what引导的宾语从句、省略（Looking forward前省略了Are you）以及“make+宾语+宾补”（make the event a huge success）等；应用的高级词汇有be expected to, give full play to （让……充分发挥）, along with, hand in, occur to, contribution等。
【实战演练】
下面是一位同学的习作，请根据点评中指出的问题对它进行修改。
Notice
An exciting event “Innovations on Campus” is around the corner. Chances will be offered to every student who wants to attend. But your innovations must be related to campus, such as your school life and your relationships with classmates. What’s more, it’s really necessary to share your ideas with us, particularly how you came up with it and why you designed it, which will help others make better sense of your work.
The event will be held in the gym from June 16th to 18th. And the prize-giving ceremony is from 3 pm to 5 pm on June 18th. If you want to get more information about it, please call Li Hua. My number is 44876655.
Come on, everybody! It’s your show time.
Student Union
【点评】
该习作完成了试题规定的任务，覆盖了所有内容要点，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，有效地使用了语句间的连接成分。可以提高的地方有：①第三句中的your innovations与下句came up with it中的it存在指代不一致的情况；②how you came up with it和why you designed it表意有重复之处；③My number is 44876655中的My指代错误。
【参考答案】
Notice
An exciting event “Innovations on Campus” is around the corner. Chances will be offered to every student who wants to attend. But your innovation must be related to campus, such as your school life and your relationships with classmates. What’s more, it’s really necessary to share your ideas with us, particularly about why you came up with it and how you designed it, which will help others make better sense of your work.
The event will be held in the gym from June 16th to 18th. And the prize-giving ceremony is from 3 pm to 5 pm on June 18th. If you want to get more information about it, please call Li Hua at 44876655.
Come on, everybody! It’s your show time.
Student Union
附3：通知常用句式及模板
■常用词语
give a talk 做演讲
give a concert 开音乐会
hold a meeting/class/celebration 举办会议/开展一堂课/举行庆祝活动
attend a meeting/sports meet/lecture 参加会议/运动会/讲座
have a class/a meeting/discussion上课/开会/讨论
make a trip 旅行
set up a club 成立一个俱乐部
set out(for)/arrive at...出发去/到达……
show sb.around/visit a place 带领某人参观某地
meet at the gate of 在……的大门处见面
go to a concert/the movies/the theatre/the cinema 去听音乐会/看电影
join sb.in/take part in 参加
常用开头语
Ladies and gentlemen/Boys and girls，may I have your attention，please！女士们，先生们/男孩们，女孩们，请注意！
Attention，please！请注意！
Be quiet，please！请安静！
Listen，please.There is going to be... 请大家听我说……有一个……
Excuse me，everyone！I'd like to tell you that... 各位，打扰一下。我想要告诉大家……
I have an announcement to make. 我要宣布一个消息。
I have something important to tell you. 我有重要的事情告诉大家。
常用句型
There is going to be a talk on... 有一个关于……的演讲。
The meeting will be held in.../A lecture will be given at... 会议/演讲将会在……举行。
We are going to hold a discussion over... 我们将会就……进行讨论。
The Dream Club has decided to hold a meeting on... 梦幻俱乐部会就……举行会议。
All the members are expected to attend it. 所有的成员都要出席。
Everyone will be welcome. 欢迎各位到来。
You are required to take notes during the lecture. 讲座期间，请做笔记。
Please be there on time./Please attend it on time. 请准时出席。
Make sure that you.../Be sure to... 确保……
That's all.Thank you./Thank you for listening. 就是这样。谢谢。/感谢倾听。
写作模板
1.书面通知
NOTICE/Notice(标题)
Date(通知发布日期)
In order to _____(目的)，_____(事件)will be held _____ _____(具体地点、时间).The_____(事件大体内容)．Those who_____(要求).
All are welcome to come.
The School Students' Union(发布通知者)
2.口头通知
Boys and girls/Ladies and gentlemen/Friends(称呼)，
May I have your attention，please?I have an announcement to make.
_____(事件)will be held_____(地点、时间).The_____(内容).All the teachers and students are required_____(要求).
That's all.Thank you.
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