【英语说-写作】

2018 初二上册期中考试雅礼卷

作文表达：

      假如你是李华，根据表格所提供的信息，写一篇短文介绍你和你的好朋友Alan的相似之处和不同之处.

要求：条理清楚，包含以上要点，可适当发挥.

字数：80词左右.

 

【英语说-作文解析思路】

1. 考察主题：【Friends】符合初二Unit 3 长篇阅读内容

2. 考察时态：【形容词与副词的比较级与最高级】运用能力

3. 思路解析：

    a. 题目分析— 图表作文

        80%主干— 将图表中的内容结合语言多样性恰当地表达出来；

        20%内容— 针对友谊的话题可发表自己的见解. 

    b. 词汇要求：基础形容词、副词 + 形容词和副词的比较级与最高级应用

        参考词汇：tall, outgoing, serious, quiet, study hard, TV shows, reading books, junk food, go to the library , at the weekends；

     c. 语法要求：  

        比较级用法：A  be / do  +比较级+ than + B；

        最高级用法：A  be / do  + 最高级 in / among / of….

        原级用法：    A  be / do as + 原级 + as B

【Key Points】

        作文主题的来源基础来自于课本的同步阅读题材.

        考核主旨就是为了检测学员是否懂得糅合知识点、加以运用.

            

回归到学员们写作文的状态：

1.  是不是拿到作文后就急着写开头，I have a friend, his name is Alan, he is taller than me ….

2.  是不是认为按照图表内容完整无误地记叙完，作文就可以接近满分？

3.  是不是拿到答案后，都不知道为什么扣了分？

 

如果你是7年级上学期，这样的写作思维不会有太大误差，因为每个年级对作文的能力考核是不相等的.

7年级上学期要求完整无误地表达，多考察描述文和记叙文；

7年级下学期要求表达的多样性，例如词汇丰富性、语法多样性和句式多样性；

而8年级上学期则开始更高要求：

通过事物表象引发思考、适当总结规律，考察以【议论+描述】为主，通过事实举例才完成议论观点的表达.

雅礼卷考核的表面是好朋友之间的相似点和不同点；

但如果深入，会发现和Unit 3 2b passage 阅读文章的观点很相似：朋友无论是相似的还是不同的，都可以成为朋友. 

 

这时候，我们需要唤醒课文的原文了. 

 

初二Unit 3 2b Passage原文

A.

         My mother told me a good friend is like a mirror. 

         I'm quieter and more serious than most kids. That's why I like reading books and I study harder in class.

         My best friend Yuan Li is quiet too, so we enjoy studying together. I'm shy so it's not easy for me to make friends. But I think friends are like books -- you don't need a lot of them as long as they're good.

 

 

B.         

          It's not necessary to be the same.

          My best friend Larry is quite different from me. He is taller and more outstanding than me. We both like sports, but he plays tennis better, so he always wins.

          However,Larry often helps to bring out the best in me. So I'm getting better at tennis. Larry is much less hard-working, though. I always get better grade than he does, so maybe I should help him more.

 

 

C.

           I don't really care if my friends are the same as me or different.

           My favorite saying is,'A true friend reaches for your hand and touches your heart.'

           My best friend Carol is really kind and very funny. In fact, she's funnier than anyone I know. I broke my arm last year but she made me laugh and feel better. We can talk about and share everything. I know she cares about me because she's always there to listen.

*蓝色字体：形容词和副词在文章中的应用；

*红色字体：连接词的恰当使用、中心思想的表达.

 

唤醒原文后，我们是不是可以在描述表格的基础之上，加以观点的论述，让整篇文章的饱和度更高？

 

【英语说-参考例文】

           People always say that a good friend is like a mirror, it means the friends you make with are the same. However , I don’t really care if my friends are the same as me or different.

           Alan who is a taller and more outgoing schoolboy, does well in playing the piano. Meanwhile , he is much more humorous than me.  I am kind of serious and quiet that’s why I prefer to watch TV at home. These are the differences between us.

           However, we both enjoy playing sports and dislike junk food. Both of us live healthily . At the weekends, we usually go to the library together for reading. As for studies, Alan works as hard as me. 

           I think friends are like books -- you don't need a lot of them as long as they're good.

 

红色字体：引用课本原文观点来支撑作文观点.

整篇文章采用了形容词的比较级来突出强调好朋友之间的不同点；同时用原级形式来表达相似之处；

转折连接词 however、主观意识表达 I think 等恰当地承接了文章段落，让文章的前后逻辑表达更加自然.